At least, thats what I hoped. Each night during my fifteen-minute break at the coffee shop, I looked around at the customers, picked two of them to put together, and brainstormed a happy ending for them. Usually they were students because the coffee shop was so close to campus. They had no real problems. Their parents were paying their way through college. The price of one of their nightly mochas could have kept me in peanut butter crackers for two weeks. Any of these young men and women could be perfect for each other. They just didnt know it, and they would never introduce themselves to each other except in a file on my laptop.
But sometimes the customers were young professionals. Guys with the latest haircut, chicks with unruly but strangely flattering hair and no makeup, all wearing the most expensive off-the-rack suits they could afford. I would be this girl eventually. If I played my cards right and won the publishing internship, I could be this girl in January. She loved her job and was set for life. She could hardly believe her luck when the hot guy from the adult nonfiction department at her publishing house walked over to her table and asked to sit down.
I treasured this fifteen minutes a day of writing. Lived for it. So, much as I loved Summer, I felt a twinge of annoyance when she bounced into the coffee shop during my break almost a week after the beach party. More trouble must have bubbled up between her and Manohar. The coffee shop was out of her way. Hey! I called. Whats up?
She slid into the chair across from me. I was just coming back from the library.
Headed to the dorm? This is not on your route.
Yeah. I wanted to ask you something. She suppressed a smile. Have you read the stories for creative-writing class tomorrow?
I pointed at her. No! Ive needed to do that, but I got behind in my reading, and when I get off work I have to study for a calculus test tomorrow. Im going to be down to the wireI winced at the unintentional horse racing metaphorreading stories right up until class. Why?
Hunters story is about you.
What do you mean, his story is about me? I asked loudly enough that my boss peeked through the doorway from the back and put his fists on his hips.
Uh-oh, Summer whispered. Id better go before I get you in trouble.
Too late. But I couldnt let her go yet. My heart was beating so hard, I might actually die of curiosity. Is there a redhead in Hunters story?
No, but
Okay, thanks for the heads-up. Ill read it tomorrow. I closed my laptop, dismissing her, and went back to work. As I made a cappuccino for my next victim, my heart slowed down. I wasnt in Hunters story. This was more of Summers wishful thinking, mentally writing a story of her own.
That idea got me through my night at work, hours of studying, and a reasonably successful calculus test the next morning even though Hunter sat across the room. But an hour before creative-writing class, alone in the library, absorbed in Hunters literally and figuratively steamy story, I wasnt so sure.
6
Blurred Vision
by Hunter Allen
His friends created a beach party in the mens bathroom on their floor of the dorm by turning on all the showers full force. They said the dorm had a huge boiler that never ran out of hot water, like any converted brownstone in New York City. This seemed strange to him because he was from horse country, where fences were made of limestone boulders that workers had dug up from the ground in 1900, where crops were dried in barns painted black to take best advantage of the warm sun, where the grass was green year-round because of the sun and the rain and the nourishing limestone breaking down deep under the ground. Humans and the elements lived in harmony in the country. He had no understanding of the city, where the sheer number of humans overwhelmed the elements completely, yet the boiler never ran out of hot water.
This feels so good, said the girl under his hands. His friend tending bar had reported that the girl had downed three strawberry daiquiris already. She was in possession of a fourth, but she had balanced it on the soap dish while she stepped into the hot shower, soaking her bathing suit. She looked up at him through half-closed eyes. He watched droplets from the shower ricochet off the mildewed walls and splash into the clear plastic cup, forming a layer of hot water on top, a second layer of melted strawberry-tinged slush underneath. It no longer looked appetizing, but shed drunk enough for his purposes anyway.
It does feel good. He slid his hand around her, toward her latissimus dorsi. He expected this move to go smoothly, but his skin jerked against hers with wet tension. Hed hardly started and he needed lube already.
His friends would laugh at him for thinking this. All men were supposed to come to college experienced. They should know how to massage a girl in the shower in front of half the dorm and act suave about it. They should know how to get this girl into bed shortly afterward and make her think it was a good idea.
He would never have admitted this to his friends or anyone else, but he was not experienced. And the main reason he hadnt gotten around in high school had just walked through the bathroom door directly behind him.
He could not see her with his back turned. He could not hear her husky voice. But he could hear the giggles of her ubiquitous friend. And he watched the mist from the showers settle in layers like the ice and artificial flavoring in the cup on the soap dish set into the wall. The fog from the showers should have swirled with turbulence when she and her friend opened the bathroom door. Instead it calmed and quieted, just as the whole world slowed to a canter, a walk, a halt with its ears pricked up when she came near.
Her stare burned a hole between his shoulder blades. She could stare all she wanted but he would not turn around. Never again. Shed made it clear since they were twelve that he was not good enough for her. If she changed her mind now just because he had his hand on another girls latissimus dorsi in a public shower, she could eat her heart out.
Setting his chin down on the girls shoulder, he watched his own index finger blaze a silvery path through the droplets of water clinging to her back. His fingertip reached her spine and he traced small circles there, a taste of what he would do to other parts of her later. He wondered whether she was already too numb to feel his touch and understand the innuendo.
Eyes still half closed, she lifted her chin and parted her lips for a kiss.
Instead of kissing her, he pressed his finger into her fossae lumbales laterales, the indentations in the small of her back, and stopped. She was a beautiful girl, no doubt, and he did know her name. The situation had not quite reached that level of cliché. But he did not know what her major was, or what she planned to do for a career, or what city in Jersey she was from. His friends would make fun of him if they found out this bothered him.
The girl from home had crossed the room behind his back and settled on a lawn chair. He could hear her now, joining a conversation as if she wasnt staring a hole through him.
Maybe she wasnt.
That decided the matter. He kissed the girl in front of him. He eased her backward until she was trapped between his body and the mildewed wall. Not that he needed to trap her. She willingly opened her mouth for him.
Maybe she knew what his major was and what town he was from. He had not told her, but maybe shed found out. Or maybe it really didnt matter.
This is what he told himself as he pressed his tongue into her oral cavity. Her upper and lower lips were erogenous zones. The harder he kissed her, the faster her sensors fired messages to the nucleus accumbens in her brain. That center in turn sent a tingling sensation to her mons pubis, awakening it to the possibility that it might be next. She and he were from different states, after all, and unlikely to be related, and sensing this through their pheromones was apparently all the motivation they or anybody else needed to start the reproductive cycle.
He was running his tongue just above her clavicle when she pressed her hands to his pectoral muscles, feigning a request that he pause. Its awfully crowded in here, she whispered, her breath curling the steam. Could we go to your room where its private?
She had made the first move. He would get what hed come for without even feeling guilty. He sniffed deeply with satisfaction, savoring this momentand smelled the Stachybotrys growing on the walls.
Before he could back out of the situation, he grabbed her hand, epidermis to epidermis, and pulled her toward the door. The crowd was thick, the mist thicker, the lights flashed and bobbed in a bankrupt approximation of a disco, and still he caught a glimpse of the girl hed hoped was not really behind his back, watching him.
Outside the bathroom, in the frigid hallway, his companions ni**les hardened beneath her bikini top with the release of testosterone because of the alcohol, and oxytocin because of his hands on her. As he led her toward his room, she tripped. He slowed his pace and generously supported her gluteus maximus so she wouldnt fall before they reached their destination.
He closed his door behind them. She stumbled to his bed, sat down, and kicked off her flip-flops. She was a lot more ready than he was. His friends would be appalled that he hesitated. There was nothing wrong with this scenario. Nothing.
He pulled her up to standing, tossed back the blankets, and sat her back down on the sheets. Cotton, Gossypium hirsutum, rather than silk, a secretion of Bombyx mori, but he was in college and nobody lost his virginity under ideal circumstances. Otherwise he wouldnt have a story to embellish when he was fifty. Gently he drew her down on top of him. He opened his bathing suit and pushed past hers. As the nucleus accumbens in his own brain flooded with activity, he pondered what species of monster hed become.
*
A MONSTER WHO GETS SOME, KYLE murmured as we all placed Hunters story on top of our stacks. But that comment was under the table, so to speak, not part of the official class discussion. The official discussion, starting with Manohars opinion, was even worse: I just want to thank Hunter for being so brave and sharing his first time with us.
The response was snorts and howls of laughter from the men in the class, and it set the tone for the discussion of Hunters story. I expected someone, maybe even a treacherous Manohar or Brian, to point out that the narrators horse country place of origin was not Long Island. The limestone fences, black tobacco barns, and green grass in winter were iconic Kentucky, Bluegrass Region, and anybody reading between the lines could have figured out that Hunter was my stable boy. But nobody mentioned this. They were too busy guffawing about sex.
The women stammered about how moving the story was, how vulnerable the narrator was, and how interesting it was to get a guys point of view on dating. This was polite of them and hid what they really wanted to say, which was that theyd been hot for Hunter before and now they could hardly stand it. He had become a movie star.
The men snickered and said they thought the story ended too soon, which was their way of saying they realized all the women were hot for Hunter and they wished theyd thought of this ploy themselves. They tried so hard to have the right clothes, the right hair, and money for dates. None of them had ever thought to use the writing class as a pickup place.
Summer put her chin on her fist and squinted across the table at Manohar. What do you think this story is about, Manohar? She leaned across me and said to Gabe, Please excuse me for speaking out of turn, but I think this is important. She turned back to Manohar. You dont think this story is about unrequited love at all, do you? You think its about getting laid.
Yes! exclaimed most of the men, while most of the women chirped, No! Gabe and Hunter, at opposite ends of the table, both scribbled across their papers without looking up. Hunter sat draped across his comfy chair as if the class discussed his writing every day.
Even when its so laboriously unsexy? Summer asked. Theres a lot more going on here. Hunter is smarter than that.
Youre reading too much into it, Manohar said. Hes making fun of a certain other supposedly sexy story written for this class. Hes showing how clinical and predictable and unsexy it really was.
I opened my mouth to tell Manohar that Id had enough. It was one thing for him to insult my story while we discussed it in class. It was too much for him to insult my story while we discussed someone elses. He had already let me know he loathed my writing. I got it. Enough already!
As usual, Summer beat me to it. Im not sure whether Hunter did this on purpose or if he even realizes he did it, but theres a beautiful dichotomy between the language he uses for the two girls. The girl hes with in the shower is described in anatomical terms, like an object. He even calls her it once, near the beginning. It does feel good.
The room filled with the clatter of flipping pages, then a pause as everyone searched for the passage.
Noooo, Manohar said. Hes responding to the girl saying, This feels so good. It equates to this, which means standing in the shower.
Summer talked over him. The girl hes trying to make jealous is never physically described at all. He conveys only his emotions about her. He loves her so much that he cant even see her.
I had resolved not to look at Hunter while the class was discussing his story. I would not peek at him now to gauge his reaction. If Summer wanted to make more out of his relationship with me than was actually there, that was her issue, not mine. I had a vested interest in staying out of any further tangles involving this creative-writing class intersecting with my real life. To remind myself of this, I traced INTERNSHIP over and over on a scratch sheet of papernot on my copy of Hunters story, which I would have to pass back to him.
Erin? Gabe asked.
In this shocking nanosecond, I thought Gabe was asking Hunter whether I was the girl he loved so much he couldnt see.
In the next horrible nanosecond, I realized my stupid mistake. While Id daydreamed, everyone in the class had commented on Hunters story. Summer had forfeited her turn since shed already responded to Manohar. Gabe was calling on me for my opinion.